impatience

Posted: April 8, 2010 in Uncategorized

i won’t wait until you want to be committed
asylum workers don’t wait for wanting to be committed
they sedate you and put you in tangly jackets
they hoist you into big fort knox vans
and away you go to paradise and hell

love is supposed to be pink
and heart-shaped
and fuzzy
and ethereal
and everlasting

i know this is infatuation because
i want to take my love and form it into
a bat or a club or a staff or nun-chuks
and beat you over the head with it
and drag you away into a gentler place

i want to put you in my fight club
and the first rule is
don’t tell anybody
and the second rule is
don’t tell anybody

and the third rule is
tell me everything you
don’t tell anybody
and the fourth rule is
love me back RIGHT NOW

napowrimo #8: unusual love connections

Today, think of your current love, your current obsession or the one who got away. Now come up with five or more unusual metaphors for the object of your affection/obsession: wool scarf, cough drop, puddle, half-empty bottle of red wine… Choose your favorite of the bunch and write a poem celebrating (or trashing) your love.

one of my erstwhile crush’s descriptors for me is crazy. because i am, or else i wouldn’t be able to put up with the world. or be attracted to him. so i decided to use literal images of institutions. it’s not pleasant; it’s not pretty — but neither is most dimensions of love.

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Comments
  1. Richelle says:

    I like the reference to Fight Club! And the line “and away you go to paradise and hell” is great!

  2. Andy Sewina says:

    Phew, I can taste the impatience in this! Difficult subject, handled well!!

  3. Lawrence C says:

    I also like to describe and use “real” things, trying to do that. It is such a challenge. I LOVE your Fight Club!

  4. lucychili says:

    i think it is very real =)

  5. LOVE the third rule! 🙂

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